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| Image information: Fairy tale castle by Dobre Cezar. Photo is of Peleș Castle in Sinaia, Romania. Found on wikimedia. |
Introduction to Me
(photo information: personal photo of me in Prague; December 2016) Hi, See that photo? That's me. I'll be the one posting and updating you on this blog. Now, you should probably know a little bit about me before jumping right in, right? Let's start with the stock college intro. Hi, my name is Elizabeth. I'm a senior from Tulsa, OK. I'm an art history major. Yes, we really do exist. Although there is only about 8 of us at OU and 5 are graduation this semester. So you know one! Congratulations. I’ll be graduating this spring and by the end of this semester I’ll know what the future holds. Unfortunately, I have to wait until March/April to hear back from the graduate programs I applied to. Here is the obligatory list of places I applied: University of Houston, Texas Christian University, University of Texas (I know, sacrilege), University of Delaware, Case Western Reserve University, and Georgetown University. I guess I’ll tell you a little about what I’ll b
Elizabeth,
ReplyDeleteI like your website design! The different headers are nice to look at, and I like that you have already thought about that the titles of your stories will be.
After reading this introduction, I am so excited to see how your storybook goes! I love the idea of a museum where stories are true and come to life. Almost like Night at the Museum! I am excited to see how you retell the three stories you’ve chosen. They are so well known that I think the possibilities for telling them are endless, and people will always know what story you are referencing. However, it looks like you plan to tell the more original versions, where things are always so squeaky clean. I love that! I wonder if your stories will be told from the point of view of a curator, or rather the point of view of those who lived the stories. Maybe both? I look forward to walking through these exhibits with you!
Hi Elizabeth!
ReplyDeleteYour storybook idea is so awesome and creative! I really admire that you already have your stories picked out and ready to be written! The way you've framed the stories as true tales from real families that donated their items is so intriguing, and I think it will bring them to life in a unique way! Honestly, I kind of wish I could visit this museum in real life. I'm curious about what you're going to do with images and media with this project. Already you’ve created a sense of setting with your intro cover photo, and I think you could really build on that, especially in terms of adding galleries of artifacts or little museum-like info videos at the beginning or end of the “exhibits”. Whether you do that sort of thing or not, I'm excited to see how you build on this excellent foundation in the coming weeks!
P.S. I really appreciate your comment wall pun!
Hi Elizabeth!
ReplyDeleteI like the design and flow of your storybook. I also think it is awesome that you have already decided what you are going to write about for your stories. And you also already picked out banner pictures for each story which kind of sets the tone for what direction each story is going to go. I am excited to see how they turn out. This museum sounds more exciting than any museum I've ever been to and I have been to a lot since my parents love going to boring museums all across the country. I am excited to see who will be telling each story as in from whose perspective. Will someone from the museum being telling the story or will the artifact display the story. Either way I am super excited to see where each story takes us and how you are going to change each one!
Hi Elizabeth! I am in Laura Gibbs Indian Epics class and this week she is encouraging us to read projects from Myth-Folklore. I really like the theme of your project. Your introduction writing runs really smoothly and is easy to read. You do a great job drawing your readers in through the introduction. I know that I will be coming back to read and comment more on your stories as the semester goes on. I also like how you included the titles of your next stories/entries because it excites anticipation for what will happen next. Have you thought about adding more images to your introduction? I think that more images will help break up the text and help the reader see into the museum. Maybe find pictures that would represent the artifacts that you talk about? I look forward to reading more of your stories! Good luck with the rest of the semester!
ReplyDeleteHi Elizabeth! This project is so fun! It reminds me of Night at the Museum (the movies). If you haven't seen those, you should. Your project site looks very good, and it relates easily to your topic. Your introduction was thorough and prepared me for the first story. On your completed story, I was at first caught off guard by the narrator approach. That made sense once I kept reading, but if you included a last sentence on your intro that defines that itll be told like a movie, that could help with your storybook transitions! Other than that, your changing of the original story was super interesting and you definitely made it your own by not only making changes but adding in new characters. Because your story is about a museum, more images and imagery-text could really benefit your stories and make them come to life. Great job!
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ReplyDeleteFirst of all, I really like the way your website is set up. I knew what was happening immediately and everything was very informative. I also love the organization of your site; it is very easy for us readers to navigate. Your Introduction is very inviting and I liked reading it a lot and it made me want to hear more! I like how you explain that your storybook is about the artifacts but also the stories behind them and what makes them significant and important. Your first story, "If the shoe fits" is very different and good! It's got a Cinderella feel to it which fascinates me since I love princesses! I like the format of the story but at times it can be a little hard to follow. I sometimes got confused with the speakers and narrators but I think that's just because there is so many of them! I love the moral of the story as well because it is really important to consider! Overall, great job and I can't wait to read more!
Hey Elizabeth! I love where your project is headed! I liked the introduction page, because it laid out everything that was going to happen in the next few stories. I agree with Demery's comment that it reminds me of the Night at the Museum movies! Not sure if that was what you were going for or if that is what inspired you, but it definitely has that vibe of certain artifacts coming alive and telling their stories. Your story "If the Shoe Fits" is certainly interesting! I like the way you made it into sort of a play and how you have certain narration moments where it tells us what exactly the characters are doing! I found it a little difficult to follow, but that may be just because I'm used to reading stories without those little pauses. However, I think that you should keep it how you have it because it's something different and I enjoyed reading something in a different style :)
ReplyDeleteHi Elizabeth! I am from the Epics of India class. First off I love the layout of your website. It is simple, yet elegant which goes perfectly with your theme. Your home page is perfect. It does a great job of giving an overview of your project and introducing the reader to the theme. Your introduction page does a fantastic job of giving a broad overview of your project and giving an overall setting for the stories. It also does a great job of preparing the reader for what is coming and grabbing their interest. For the story, If the Shoe Fits, I really like how you did a video script. This is definitely a unique way to retell a story and is the first time I have seen a story like this. I also like the title. This was an excellent way to retail such a popular story. It really did the story well. Overall, great job and good luck finishing the project!
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ReplyDeleteI am from the Epics of India class. First off, the theme and design of your website is very intriguing! It is so creative! I love the direction you are going with. I love that in your introduction you paraphrase the stories you have written. It gives the reader an idea of the story and allows them to further decide which story to read! I really like the museum theme and how each story represents an exhibit. You have done a fantastic job with your storybook! I love your writing style for If the Shoe Fits. It is a unique way of retelling the story. I also like how you use multiple pictures while alternating sides. Everything seems very well thought out. I have noticed that other storybooks only use one. I am excited to read the other stories you will have!
Hey there, Elizabeth!
ReplyDeleteI thought that your project layout looked great! It gave me a very good first impression. I am from the Indian Epics course, so I was excited to check out what you had been working on in the Myth Folklore class. I took the Myth Folklore class last semester, and I had a great time building my portfolio. I remember reading some of the Brothers Grimm stories, and I really enjoyed them. I was happy to see that you thought the same. I never had the chance to retell them. I think you are off to a great start here. The theme of the storybook is something that I think is really cool. This is definitely a unique idea that I have not seen before. I think the constant scene setting in your first story adds a really nice touch to the reading. It helps create an image in the reader's head of what is taking place. Keep up the great work!
Hey Elizabeth! This is my second story I am reading from the myth and folklore class! I am from Indian Epics and I am continually impressed by the types of stories and portfolios I am finding in this other class! I love how you choose a museum and history to retell your stories. I think it is super creative to do it that way! I liked the Grimm's stories and how you made the shoes not fit and it was particularly interesting to see so much visual detail! This gives me a lot of ideas when I think about adding some detail to my own stories with pictures and stuff! Also, you did a great job on your author's notes and it made a lot of sense to me why you chose a museum as the topic of your portfolio. Anyways, great project and I look forward to reading more!
ReplyDeleteHi Elizabeth! I remembered being so excited about your project even when just the introduction was up, so I decided to come back and check out what you've added since then! I absolutely love the way you chose to tell the story through a series of interviews cut together. It has the feel of a real museum exhibit, but the story itself didn't come across as choppy or confusing. It's such a creative method, and I wouldn't have thought it could be done so well in writing. The formatting of the page really helped I think, because the images broke up the text without interrupting it. I haven't experimented much with formatting on my own project site, but reading yours has given me some inspiration! I'm really excited to see what story you add next, and I'm curious about if you'll stick with the same format or experiment with communicating a museum exhibit through some other means, like a tour guide. Either way, great job so far!
ReplyDeleteHi Elizabeth! This is my second myth and folklore project I have looked at so far. First, I really like the theme of your story and the idea that you have placed with in it. I also really like the pictures you have chosen throughout the project. The overall layout of your website is really good and it is easy to navigate. Great Job!
ReplyDeleteOnto your stories. First, I like your introduction! It is well written and really helps to explain what the stories are about. Also, each on of your stories is very well written and easily understandable. I wonder what would happen if you had not made your stories like scripts? I don't think the message would have been as strong. The only suggestion I have is to maybe add some background color to give a little pop to your project as a whole. Overall, your project looks awesome and I am looking forward to coming back and looking at it at the end of the semester!
Hey Elizabeth,
ReplyDeleteYour storybook is fantastic! The site design is attractive and easy to read. The images work very well for the aesthetic you are trying to create with the museum. The first story I read was "Love in the Time of Fairytales". I have never read any of the Brothers Grimm fairytales before. I've only seen really the more "lighthearted" adaptions of those fairytales like the children's stories I heard growing up or like the movie Tangled. I really liked the perspective you went within your adaptation. In your author's note, you said that you decided to remove the magic aspects of the story in order to make it more realistic. I think you did a really good job of making real. Especially with Henry losing his eyesight and not getting it back. A lot of times stories have too happy of endings to make it feel real. Great job!
Elizabeth,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed the layout of your story book. It really helped capture the stories that it holds. The image choices all really add to the story, and made it easy to picture what you were writing about. The introduction does a great job of revealing the overarching theme you are going for. Writing your stories as if they were a script was very creative, and gave the story a different feel than most that I have read this semester. It almost felt like it was a short film I was reading the script too. Your authors notes are very descriptive, and provide great insight as to what you were basing things off of.
Hey there, Elizabeth! How is your semester going? I think it is crazy that we are so far along in the semester and we are still meeting new people in our classes! I really enjoyed visiting your website, especially since you are in the other class. I love visiting the other class’ website because it is new and fresh information.
ReplyDeleteYour website is so cool! You have done a great job of incorporating the museum theme in all of the detail on your page. The photos, the font, and just the feeling of your site all tie together in order to point toward your main theme. I love that even though your topic may change throughout the stories on your website, you still stick to your museum theme in the images and in other details. You have done such a great job on this website! One thing you could add to make it feel even more like a museum is some music!
Hi Elizabeth,
ReplyDeleteI'm from the Indian Epics course and I decided to pick your story for my free story that I haven't read yet this week. I think that your website is very well made and easy to navigate. The images you used for your banner and your story fit really well with your story. I really liked the theme of everything being like a museum aspect. I like the the "cut to" parts in your stories as well. All in all I like the writing style you used and the theme of your stories. Best of luck to you the rest of the semester.
Hey Elizabeth! Great work on your storybook, this is both absolutely adorable and written well. I would like to call to your attention your Mirror Mirror story. It just says "Text here". Perhaps you just made the page and haven't posted the story yet, but I just wanted to be sure you were aware!
ReplyDeleteI think that it's so creative how you have transcripts from exhibit videos. I think you could have changed it up a little (which maybe is what you were planning on doing with Mirror Mirror). perhaps one story has the transcriptions of the little plaques from a room dedicated to someone's story. It could even be from the perspective of someone visiting the museum and we see her reaction! I don't think you have to follow the same format and you could get super creative with it!
But great work so far and I look forward to reading the finished product at the end of the semester!
Hey, Elizabeth, nice to meet you. I am in the Indian Epics class and chose your project to give feedback on for my free choice. I really like the museum concept of your storybook. The design and layout of your site really help tie together your theme. The way you've written your stories is super creative and refreshing. Refreshing as in it's not just a standard narrative format, which is great. I also really like your image placement throughout your stories, they're placed in a way that breaks up the text without hindering the flow of the story, well done. As for revision suggestions, the writing is great so I don't have any suggestions there, but I think you could take your site to another level by adding some type of other media. Music perhaps? Or an ambient noise track - I'm sure you could find one on YouTube that would compliment your project well. Anyway, great job!
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ReplyDeleteI adore the premise of your Storybook, and love how you have incorporated the museum theme into all of the stories you have written thus far. The idea of writing your stories as video transcripts is so creative, and you have accomplished it well. I think you are doing an excellent job of adapting the fairy tales for modern life, making them realistic and readable. There are a few portions of your stories that could use closer editing, mostly for typos, but I truly enjoyed them overall! In the third story about Snow White, I would love to see a princess that is less graceful about the wrongdoings against her. In the real world, some crime victims become outraged by their experiences, and I think that could be an interesting twist on the kind and demure Snow White we know from Disney. However you write her, I am excited to read it!
Hey Elizabeth! Great job on your storybook! To start, the concept of having a museum is such a fun idea. It also makes it easy to follow for each story. I liked how the images that you picked out match the theme and look professional. What gave you the original idea to start a storybook with a fairytale theme? I agree with some of the comments that were already mentioned. If you added more images to the site, it will break up the text more. I know that these stories can get kind of long, so they is a very easy way to fix that problem. As for your stories, they are very polished and readable. I could not find any mistakes in your writings. It looks like you have revised them many times. Overall, great work! I cannot read to read more of your writings. I know that the semester is coming to an end, but do you have plans to write one more story?
ReplyDeleteHi Elizabeth! I really love how you have developed the storybook into different stories and items left in a museum by families. My guilty pleasure is watching crime shows and I really liked how you made the Rapunzel story into a crime show video. I think you did a wonderful job with the transcriptions. It really made me feel like I was reading an actual transcript of a crime show. I could almost hear the Law and Order SVU theme play in between your transitions. I also like how you have added several images to each of your stories. In most people’s stories they simply put on image at the top and call it good. Your pictures that are laid out at strategic points in your stories really help the readers visualize what is going on. I really liked all of your stories and I hope that you will finish up your storybook.
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ReplyDeleteSome how I had not read your storybook before, but I am so glad I finally got the chance to read it! Your writing is wonderful and creative. I can quickly tell that you have put a lot of time and effort into this project. The overall look of your site is very nice. The images you have chosen really help set the scene for the project and bring the stories to life. Your writing style is very unique in this and I really like it. I can easily picture walking through the museum. The way you describe and tell the stories is exactly like when I visit exhibits and listen to the audio guide things. This is a seriously creative project! I noticed on your Mirror Mirror page that there is no story, it simply says text here...
Hi Elizabeth! I really like the way you modernized these stories. They read like transcripts of a true crime show, which is a great way to present the way we treat stories of abuse or attempted murder today. The inclusion of images along with the text also helped give it the feel of reading through a file on some former crimes. You did a good job of finding ways to make the stories still make sense without magic, especially since all the original fairy tales were so heavily dependent on magic.
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ReplyDeleteI was so excited to come back to your Storybook this week and read how you finished out with Snow White; I was not disappointed!
Like I wrote after the last time I read your project, I was hoping for a Snow White with more agency than the Disney Princess, and you wrote exactly that. I appreciate that you developed Snow into a character that would intensely question the actions of her stepmother, and that she was not saved by the stereotypical prince. It was also SO REFRESHING that Snow's father divorced the wicked stepmother. The trope of a father who is blinded by his love for a terrible woman, and then tacitly consents to the mistreatment of his child is overused and annoying, so I love that you took your story in a different direction!
The only thing I think is missing from this story is the dwarves; Snow White loses something special without them!